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Tue, Dec. 8th, 2009 | 06:02 pm  slavezombie

a cross-post, in the event my community entry is not moderator proof at little_details

Nobody wants to cross paths with their old high school flames, at least that's what I've heard. I think there's an exception to that rule and this doesn't apply to people who might've been heartbroken over the split between their "first loves". So, the story starts more than twenty years after the relationship, and considering that the two love birds in question were adolescents, they've changed dramatically in their appearance so much so that neither one could be expected to recognize the other. Nevertheless, by happenstance, the two cross paths.

The heartbroken of the two thinks that he recognizes her, yet he doesn't acknowledge nor seek affirmation that she is her by simply asking "do I know you from somewhere". It is really moments after this encounter that the protagonist conflict is revealed. The backstory, however, must convey sexual frustration for this character because it was a result of his unfaithfulness to his gf that causes the break-up way back when. Even though he's been in and out of very few relationships since then, because nobody seems to meet his expectations, he won't even try to pursue anything more meaningful than casual sex.

On the other hand, the catalyst of his lost love's menopausal behavior upon learning that her high school sweetheart is still hung over her, gives credence to the idea that their encounter at the beginning of the movie was not coincidental. How do I convey a backstory for the protagonist as someone who's transgression transformed him to vow never to fall out of love with the girl whom he's out to prove was not a figment of his imagination after seeing her double twenty+ years later?

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Bier de Stone

You gotta love the democracy in this community

from: slavezombie
date: Wed, Dec. 9, 2009 06:26 pm (UTC)

Your message submitted to the moderated community little_details has been approved and successfully posted.
http://community.livejournal.com/little_details/2507174.html ______________________________________________________________________________________ -Moderator Before somebody found a need to override the original decision to accept my entry in the little_details community, these are some of the replies I received to the post originally titled I'm living the backstory.
... Well, this was approved by the mod, so I guess it's ok. Let me just be sure that I have this correct: you want us to tell you how to write the backstory?
dustthouart -Joyce the obscure
I'm also baffled how this passed the ModTest, especially after the recent discussion on cracking down on Doing Your Own Research.
uozaki -魚崎~三河らん子

Well, this was approved by the mod, so I guess it's ok.
Nope, it wasn't.
You see, back when I first put the community on moderated posting, I removed moderation from all members after their first post was approved. That didn't work out, and I've been putting everyone back on moderation gradually, but there are so many members that it's taken a long time.
kutsuwamushi -Oh, snap!


That isn't really what this community is for. That's something a writer just has to learn on their own. No exposition. Show don't tell. Read and watch work from the experts to see how it's pulled off by others. *shrugs*

spitphire -Jenna

holidaylights -hi, i'm icarus
Lol that will teach me to click on links without looking to see where they're going. A+

Uh, hi, first time poster here. One issue I see here (speaking as an almost 40-year-old woman) is that many people tend not to forget or forgive the pain a former loved one may have caused them. I know several people who were the victims of a girlfriend, boyfriend or wife cheating on them - the only one who even considered taking the other person back had serious self-esteem issues.

queenofwords38 -Just another tool.
How is this a 'little detail'? You want someone to write the backstory?

Descriptive subject line, information on what you looked for in google/search engines, time/place/setting. Oh wait, that's for questions about little details. You may want to try a writing support and feedback community, not one intended for fact-checking and research.

ldymusyc -The Musycal One - Mad as a Stick
Like the others have said, this type of question isn't really what this community is for. The "young lovers separated but meet later in life" motif has exempla from many cultures . . . I can think of the British TV series "As Time Goes By" and the Yiddish short story "He Wants Forgiveness From Her" by Isaac Bashevis Singer, off the top of my head.

orange_fell -Streetlamp Lucozade
Drawing from the subject line of your post... ...if you're living the backstory why are you asking us how to write it?

maeveth -I'm not your bitch, bitch!

dives -A danceable solution/to teenage revolution</dd>

Edited at 2009-12-09 11:47 pm (UTC)

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Bier de Stone


from: slavezombie
date: Wed, Dec. 9, 2009 07:08 pm (UTC)

And similarly:

arrowintwolakes -MisterRoboto
What, exactly, is "menopausal behavior"? Seeing him again causes her to cease menstruating and have hot flashes?

shadefell -Brigid
I'm not exactly sure what the OP is getting at (or how this got past the mod) either, but my great-grandfather built another house to live in by himself while his wife was going through menopause. So perhaps menopausal behavior is like PMS, only orders of magnitude more intense.
atheneglaukopis -Grey-eyed Athana
    I'm sorry, but that is hilarious.
    moodring54 -Aunt Vivian's Prison for Ne'er Do Wells

    Now that is a fantastic little detail. :DDD
    ldymusyc -The Musycal One - Mad as a Stick

Deleting for being off-topic.

kutsuwamushi -Oh, Snap!

Edited at 2009-12-09 11:49 pm (UTC)

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